diff --git a/posts/realistic-benchmarks.md b/posts/realistic-benchmarks.md
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@@ -51,14 +51,16 @@ The less stress we put on the server, the worse our results become.
 
 Just imagine you're out in the woods with a crossbow.
 Now a bear jumps out of nothing and you are fighting for your life.
-You have bought that crossbow based on a benchmark published by an outlet that focuses on crossbows for beginners.
+You are going to need a couple of bolts to stop the bear running at you, and you need to shoot them as fast as possible.
+
+You bought that crossbow based on a benchmark published by an outlet that focuses on crossbows for beginners.
 Because it's focused on beginners, they have a hard capped reloading speed of 1 bolt per 5 seconds.
 Even though there are crossbolts that can reload in 3 seconds, the benchmark would not reflect this,
-because they are not targeted at experts and assume that everybody is clumsy anyway.
+because they are not targeted at experts and assume that everybody is clumsy.
 
 The benchmark showed two crossbows, A and B, but it concluded that both let you reload 1 bolt every 5 seconds,
 even though B can actually be reloaded in 3 seconds. But that result was not published.
-So you ended up buying crossbow A, leading to your death against the bear.
+So you ended up buying crossbow A instead of B, leading to your death against the bear.
 The inaccuracy of the benchmark lead to your downfall.
 
 In a life or death situation, you want the fastest crossbow out there.